Treatment: Unexpected (Concept 2) and partner Hollie Budd's 16.3

.Treatment Containing:

.Outline of form: 
.Long Form original drama Unexpected.
Content and Style: 
.It is shown on Netflix and the BBC
.Which genre: Murder, romance, violence.
Product potential position in market place: 
Who are it's competitors?
Dexter is really only the real competition as it has similar traits with no one knowing the murderer.
Specified target audience:                              
Who are they? The target audience for this TV show is more of the older adult side then any teenagers. 
Age: 20+
Gender: Both female and male.
 BECTU: They have a code of practice that applies to employers in factual TV which was released in July 2013. This code of practice includes a 9-point code  of a working day to be at least be a max length of eleven hours with two days off  every week, including breaks within the eleven hours.




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.Synopsis of series
This concept is about a women called Julie Storey set in 1992 and how the series is from her point of view. It shows how she plans the killings for each person and how she decides to pick the next victim. Each episode will start with a flashback of her life before the killings. This will give the audience a chance to get to know the main character. Once in the 2/3 episode the main storyline will kick in. This storyline consisting of a struggle between the main characters mind and heart as she struggles to go through with one of her killings that involves a male she has known for some time. This male seems to switch some type of feeling inside of her to the point where she is conflicted about the situation. The end of the series will have her writing down the next name and all you will be able to see is the surname.

.Character bios
Julie Storey
Age: 23
From South London
Date of birth 17Th July 1969
Grew up in a good home with parents. Is a only child of recently deceased John and Louise Storey. She was medically diagnosed with PTSD at the age of 16. She now lives in her own flat from outside of the city centre. Has a part time job at the local coffee shop but doesn't really talk to many people. There was a childhood event that caused her to get PTSD which plays a role in her life style now.

Character bio
Jamie Evans
Age: 24
From South London
Date of birth 13Th September 1968
Grew up next door to a quiet family in South London. Was best friends with the little girl next door for 6 years until she moved. Lives in a big flat in the city centre with his husky. Works in a business office in town.

.Episodes (outline of 10)

Episode 1: The starting scene is of a little blonde girl running around a garden laughing and shouting for her mother. That scene quickly fades and the shot is now in a dark room with pictures scattered everywhere with paper and pens. There are now footsteps being heard from a distance travelling  towards this room with faint mumbling mixed within the sounds. The camera zooms into this persons shoes and travels slowly upwards till it reaches the hands giving you the idea that it’s a women and she’s now laughing while crossing a name out on a piece of paper. The scene cuts to police tape wrapped around poles with the sound of people talking and cameras going off. There will then be quick shot of a body, which then will disappear, and you will be shown flashbacks of the night before of what lead up to that point.

Episode 2: This episode introduces the second main character, Jamie Evans. It starts off with him grabbing his things and leaving his flat for work. On his way he grabs a newspaper, which has the headlines of the murder from episode 1. The key scene of this episode is Jamie traveling to his family’s home that is outside the city centre and on a street that the other main character, Julie lives on. The shot will show her house with her sitting outside writing in a note pad and watching intently on the family greeting each other.

Episode 3: Scene outline:It starts off with a shot of a guys feet running early in the morning with faint music playing in the background. This shot quickly disappears and returns with the darkroom that has paper flying everywhere like someone is throwing it in a rage. The camera will focus on one of the ripped up pieces of paper that was just thrown which will have a list of names, some scribbled out and some still neatly written. The next shot will be of police walking around the neighbourhood knocking on doors and questioning people of the previous murder. The ending scene will be of the police trying to piece together clues on the murder.

Episode 4: Key scenes for this episode are;

. Getting more clues on who this woman could be as it shows her planning a murder.

. Julie watching Jamie while he stays with his parents.

. Flashbacks of a little girl and boy playing in the boy’s room and talking.

. Julie cleaning her house with bleach.

. Another murder of a young man. Different style of death to the first one.

Episode 5: Key scenes for this episode are;

. Showing the scene of the murder from episode 2.

. Flashbacks of the boy and girl. Starting to show who they are.

. Starting to show Julie's real colours.

. Showing more of the mystery women and the planning she does.

. Jamie getting paranoid.

Episode 6: Key scenes for this episode are;

. Finally showing who this woman is.

. Julie going out and helping the police.
. Showing Jamie being followed/watched from a distance.
. Flashbacks

Episode 7: Key scenes for this episode are;
. Blood being washed off of hands with a women laughing in background.
. Jamie running towards his parents home (Getting more paranoid).
. The police getting more clues and getting closer to the killer.
. Shots of the dark room with new plans taped to the wall.
. Flashbacks.

Episode 8: Key scenes for this episode are;
. Flashbacks of the boy and girl older. Giving you a sense of who they are.
. Pictures of Jamie up on the walls of the dark room.
. Another murder being added to the new list that is being made of murders from this new killer.
. This new body was someone who Jamie knew well which will hit home to him.

Episode 9: Key scenes for this episode are;
. Julie getting angry at herself over what she is doing to Jamie.
. Jamie finally recognizing who Julie is.
. Julie gets questioned by police but manages to get of the situation.
. Flashbacks but of only the girl and her being involved in a traumatic experience which will connect with Julie's PTSD.
. Jamie getting taken at ending scene.

Episode 10: Key scenes for this episode are;
. Flashback who Julie in the hospital and getting told her parents are dead.
. Jamie wakes up in a field with dried blood on his head with no memory of what happened.
. Julie screaming and throwing objects around her house in a fit of rage with dried blood on her clothes.
. Police locking up the wrong person who has been framed.
. Ending scene is of Julie angrily writing 4 names down on a list who all have the same last name. 

Changes to name of show
I named this show 'Julie Storey' at first but it didn't appeal to me as it seemed to boring and long. This name wouldn't catch an audience appeal so I gave the name a second thought and came up with 'Unexpected' as it connects with the story of the show and is simple but catchy. This would be easy to remember and would stand out with all the other short named shows.

Location
I thought about the location for a while and thought South London in the 90's would fit in with the story. I didn't want a quiet atmosphere as it wouldn't fit the theme of the story. So both outline of the city centre and in the city centre is a fitting role.

Here is my TV title sequence:
It isn't fully finished as I didn't have time to add all the titles to it but the sound, effects, and photographs are all fully there.

My partner Hollie Budd's title sequence and title sequence

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Concept number 3

I have chosen my third concept as my favourite, therefore I will be expanding this concept and adding much more depth to the whole concept and everything involved with it.

I preferred this concept to my other 2 as this one has more potential to have a much better storyline and also more controversy, as the main focus in this concept is quite a sensitive subject to some people. However, while going more in depth with this concept I will have to ensure that however I decide to expand it that I take other people's feelings into consideration as, like I mentioned before, this concept has a lot of touchy subjects involved such as; domestic violence, alcohol abuse and drug abuse.

 I also really felt strongly about this concept as I know how important it is to raise more awareness surrounding domestic violence and the consequences it can have; As there is a current gap in the market for this type of show I felt that it would only be fitting to write a concept based around these themes and attempt to portray them in the most realistic, yet considerate, way I can think of.

Synopsis of the series 

'The concept for this show is based around a young girl (roughly 17 years old) who meets an older guy (about 22 years old) and ends up dating him. At first he seems like your average 22 year old, he was more mature, protective and made her feel happy and safe. However, as things progressed with the couple, the young girl started to see some underline problems with her partner. He starting drinking heavily, taking a numerous amount of ‘class A drugs’, all of these things led to him becoming abusive towards the girl, which leads to a number of bad situations. The show will focus on the girl and the choices that she is faced with' 

The aim of this show will be to educate and raise awareness of the issues that will be raised in the series as all themes involved are very serious and need to be shown in a way that will shock the audience and also educate them and make them see the damage that the issues can cause.

Location

The location of this show will either be in central Cambridge or in Camden, London. The time period will be fairly present as the themes covered in the show currently happen in the world today, therefore the time period will be present.

I am currently undecided about the location of the show, as both locations would work well with the story line, everything currently depends on availability and accessibility.

Episode breakdown 

Episode 1 -  The first episode of the show will involve you meeting Alley and some of her friends as they hear about a party that they're able to go too. The episode will show the girls getting ready for the party and it will also show them attempting to get strangers to purchase them alcohol. The episode will then go over to the party, which is where Alley meets Luke. The episode will end on the two lead characters swapping phone numbers and going their separate ways at the end of the party.

Quick analysis of episode 1

·       The audience being introduced to Alley

·       Witnessing the group of girls attempting to illegally purchase alcohol

·       The girls go to the party

·       Alley then meets Luke

·       Luke and Alley begin talking

·       The episode ends with Luke and Alley exchanging phone numbers

Episode 2 - The second episode will focus on Alley and Luke meeting each other properly for the first time after the party. The episode will show the progression of their relationship, as they will be getting to know each other a bit better. The episode will show Alley and Luke spending time together over the course of about 3 days. To Alley Luke is like no other guy she has met before, she looked at him and saw someone that she knew she wanted to be with; As Alley grew up without a dad she had always been searching for a father like figure to look after her and protect her, and she saw those traits in Luke. After telling Luke about her childhood and how she has issues with not having a dad, he promises to look after her and take care of her. The end of the episode will show the couple kissing for the first time. 

Quick analysis of episode 2

·       Episode begins with Alley waking up in her room showing flashbacks of the night before

·       Luke messages Alley to ask if she would like to meet him for coffee

·       Alley goes down to the coffee shop and meets Luke

·       Luke and Alley start getting to know each other

·       Luke reveals his age (22)

·       Alley reveals her age (17)

·       Alley opens up to Luke and tells him about her issues with her dad

·       Episode ends on the couple kissing for the first time

Episode 3 - The third episode will focus on Alley and Luke becoming an official couple. At this point Luke is aware of how vulnerable and weak Alley is and sees an opportunity to take control of someone else's life, as he isn't happy with his own. During the episode Luke suggests to Alley that they should go to a party with some of his friends, Alley is at first hesitant as she is aware of Luke’s age (22) and that all of his friends are of a similar age. Despite her hesitation, she agrees to go to the party. The episode shows Luke taking various drugs and drinking, during the party you also see Luke spike Alleys drink without her finding out. The episode ends with Luke carrying Alley to an upstairs bedroom and the door closing. 

Quick analysis of episode 3

·       Episode begins were episode 2 ended, with the couple kissing for the first time

·       Luke is now aware of how vulnerable Alley is and he is able to take advantage

·       Luke is in his flat when he hears about a party with his friends

·       Alley receives a message from Luke asking if she wants to go to the party

·       Alley agrees to go to the party with Luke

·       Luke takes different drugs and drinks a lot

·       Luke spikes Alley’s drink

·       Episode ends with Luke carrying Alley to an upstairs bedroom then closing the door

Episode 4 - The fourth episode shows the day after the night before, you see Alley wake up very confused and startled to find out that her clothes had been removed and that she was in an unfamiliar environment. Luke enters the room and Alley questions what had happened the night before, he lies and tells her that she had gotten too drunk and her clothes were wet from the alcohol so he had to undress her and put her to bed. She believed him. Later on in the episode you see Luke take Alley to his flat to watch a movie, however, Alley notices that Luke is acting strange and she tries to leave the flat; he doesn't let her. The episode ends with the couple arguing and Luke pushing Alley against a wall, the episode ends with that scene. 

Quick analysis of episode 4

·       Alley wakes up in the strangers room with Luke and notices she’s unclothed

·       Alley questions Luke about what happened and he lies and tells her she was too drunk and got her clothes wet so he undressed her and put her to bed

·       Alley believes Luke

·       Alley and Luke go back to his flat to spend time together

·       Luke begins acting weird and Alley notices

·       Alley tries to leave but Luke wont let her

·       They begin arguing

·       The episode ends with Luke pushing Alley against a wall 

Episode 5 - The fifth episode takes place a week after the events that took place a day after the party. Alley is out with one of her friends who notices that Alley has attempted to cover up a bruise on her eye and that she seems very different and quite fragile, Alley quickly dismisses her friends accusations and tries to change the subject. Later on in the episode you see Alley and her friend shopping when Alley receives a text message from Luke, which states 'come to my flat now.' Alley is then too afraid to say no so she tells her friend that she has to go and help her mum at home. Alley arrives at Luke’s flat and she quickly notices that he has been drinking. Alley tries to talk to Luke about what had happened the week prior but Luke dismisses her and leaves the flat to go out with his friends. The episode ends on a shot of Alley crying in Luke's bathroom while looking at her in the mirror. 

Quick analysis of episode 5

·       Episode is set a week or so after the argument

·       Alley is out with her friend who notices Alley is trying to cover up what looks like a bruise

·       Alley and her friend then go shopping when Alley receives a text from Luke telling her to go to his flat

·       Alley leaves her friend and goes to the flat

·       Luke was very drunk by the time she arrives

·       Alley attempts to reach out to Luke and get him to tell her what’s going on but he dismisses her and leaves

·       The episode ends with Alley staring at herself in the mirror crying

Episode 6 - The sixth episode focuses on Alley working up the courage to tell one of her friends what had been happening to her with Luke in the last 3 months. Her friend immediately tells Alley to get the police involved but Alley is too afraid of the consequences. (At this point in the series Alley and Luke had been together for just over 6 months, Alley had received multiple cuts and bruises all over her body from Luke) Later on in the episode Luke takes Alley with him to go and meet some of his friends to do drugs, Alley at first refuses the offer, as she does not want to get involved with that type of crowd, but Luke forces Alley into taking some of the drugs. The episode ends with Alleys friend debating with herself whether or not to get involved and do some about the abuse that is going on with Alley. 

Quick analysis of episode 6

·       By this point in the series Alley and Luke had been together for just over 6 months

·       Alley goes and meets with her friend and finally plucks up the courage to tell her what Luke had been doing to her

·       Alley’s friend tells her that she must go to the police but Alley refuses

·       Later on in the episode Luke convinces Alley to go with him to see his friends

·       His friends are all doing drugs

·       Alley is offered drugs be she refuses

·       Luke forces her to do the drugs so she does

·       The episode ends with Alleys friend contemplating and debating with herself on what to do about the information she had received about Alley

Episode 7 - The seventh episode will focus more on Luke, during the episode you get to find out more about his background and how he had a troubled childhood. The episode will also show how he was abused as a child and how that has affected him in terrible ways. The episode will end on Luke having a breakdown on his own in his flat. 

Quick analysis of episode 7

·       This episode will be focused more on Luke

·       You will see flashbacks of Luke’s past and how he had a troubled childhood

·       All of Luke’s behaviour begins to make more sense to the audience

·       The episode will end with Luke drinking and taking drugs then him having a break down and trashing his flat

Episode 8 -  The eighth episode will take place the day after Luke had a breakdown. Alley goes into his flat to find the whole thing is trashed and Luke on the floor sleeping. Alley then quickly goes to see if he's okay by attempting to wake him, which then leads to Luke getting frustrated again and taking out on Alley by yelling at her and pushing her onto the ground. Later on in the episode you see Alley sitting at the dining room table with her mum and younger brother, her mum questions Alley on Luke and asks if everything is okay with them as she has noticed that Alley has become increasingly anti-social when it comes to her mum and brother. The end of the episode shows Alley's brother going into her room and telling her that he knows what Luke has been doing to her; this shocks Alley and the episode ends with Alley and her younger brother crying together. 

Quick analysis of episode 8

·       Episode takes place the day after Luke’s breakdown

·       Alley goes to his flat to find him asleep on the floor

·       Alley goes to see if he his okay and tries to wake him

·       Luke is woken by Alley and is immediately frustrated by her and takes his anger out on her

·       A few days later Alley is having dinner with her mum and younger brother

·       Her mum questions how things are with Luke as she is worried

·       The episode ends with Alleys 13 year old brother going into Alleys room to tell her that he knows that things are bad with Luke

·       The episode fades out with Alley and her brother sitting together crying

Episode 9 - The ninth episode is going to focus on Alley's brother and close friend talking about how they can help get Alley out of this abusive relationship. They come to the conclusion that they need too talk to Luke and find out from him what’s been going on. Later on in the episode you see Alleys friend go to Luke's flat to talk to him, when he answers the door he is surprised to see her there and tries to get her to leave but she won't budge. He reluctantly allows her to come into his flat and she begins questioning him about Alley; Luke quickly realises that she knows what he has been doing to Alley and says that if she tries getting the police involved he will not only hurt Alley but he will also hurt her. She quickly leaves his flat and reports back to Alleys brother. The episode ends with Alleys brother and friend talking to Alley and confronting her about what has been going on, they all come to an agreement that the police need to get involved in order to keep both Alley and her friend safe. 

Quick analysis of episode 9

·       This episode focuses on Alleys friend and younger brother talking about what they know and how they can try and help

·       They decide to talk to Luke

·       Alleys friend goes to Luke’s flat to talk to him

·       Luke answers the door and is surprised to see her there

·       She begins questioning him about Alley which makes him realise that she knows

·       Luke threatens her saying that he will hurt both her and Alley if she goes to the police

·       The episode ends with Alleys friend and brother talking about what had happened

Episode 10 - The final episode of the series shows Alley and her friend going to the police station to report Luke for domestic violence towards Alley, threatening her friend and also for drug abuse. The police note that the girls want to remain anonymous in order to keep them safe. However; when the police arrive at Luke’s flat to take him into custody he knows straight away that Alley and her friend went and reported him. The episode ends with Luke, Alley and her friend all in a courtroom in order to try and get Luke to go to jail. The episode will end on a cliffhanger, as you won't get to see whether or not Luke is found guilty. 

Quick analysis of episode 10

·       This episode begins with Alley meeting her friend

·       Her friend convinces her to go to the police

·       Alley is reluctant at first but later on agrees

·       They go to the police and file a report against Luke

·       The police go to Luke’s flat to take him in

·       Luke knows that Alley and her friend snitched on him

·       The episode ends with Luke, Alley and her friend all in a courtroom

·       You don’t see whether or not Luke gets convicted or not as the series is left on a cliffhanger

Changes to the name of the show

I have decided to change the name of the show to 'Get Away' as I feel that it fits in more with the theme of the show and the storyline that it follows. 

Character profiles 

Character name - Alley 

Age - 17

Alley will be the lead character in this series. She is a troubled 17-year-old girl who ends up meeting a guy who she believes is like no other. During the series you see how the girls feelings start developing towards the man and how that would be a very bad mistake on her part. 

Alley lives in a broken home, her dad left when she was just a child and she lives with her mum and younger brother. She had always struggled with the fact that her dad had left, which leads her to get herself into bad situations. 

The series will focus on Alley attempting to find herself while also trying to get out of an abusive relationship. 

Character name - Luke 

Age - 22 

Luke is also a lead character in the series. Luke is a 'jack the lad' type of guy, very cool and composed on the outside but on the inside he is completely broken. He had been brought up in an abusive environment, which rubbed off on him and lead him to do drugs, drink excessively and be aggressive towards others. His character becomes abusive towards Alley due to his aggressive behaviour, which leads into him getting himself into trouble and causing .a lot of damage to Alley.